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Thursday, April 2, 2009

Alonzo's Salvation Part 2





This is week 57 of the Saturday Wordzzle challenge. Anyone new to the process can refer back here to find out how it works. Besides the fact that I had some unexpected company, my brain is having a hard time coming up with even a bad idea for how to use this week's words. Next week, we can all thank Quilly, who generously supplied me with 15 words for us to work with. Yippee! Boy... I thought this week's words were REALLY hard... even harder than last week's and I thought last week's were pretty terrible. I didn't think I was going to come up with something but in the end I did... Whew!
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Ten Word Challenge will be: apoplexy, doctor, hummingbird, shallow end of the pool, brigadier general, mustard, greed, parallelogram, slumber party, casual

Alonzo's Salvation Part 2

The housekeeper dialed 911. "He's dead! He's dead. Hurry." Cordillia, the housekeeper ran around frantically waiting for the police to arrive. She cleaned up a mustard stain on the white granite counter left from the twins' St. Patricks' Eve slumber party the night before. She refilled the hummingbird feeder and hurriedly hung it outside by the kitchen door. She screamed when the coroner walked up behind her and said "Excuse me, ma'am, are you Cordillia?" "You scared me to death, sneaking up on me and all. Especially with what has just happened." "I'm sorry ma'am, where can we talk?" Cordillia led him in to the casual den and offered him a chair. "I am Dr. Vance with the Coroner's office. Tell me what happened."

"I spent the night here last night because the twins were having a slumber party and the Mrs. was out of town with her sister. The Mrs. doesn't take to all the music and laughter when the girls have company, so I usually stay and chaperon while the Mrs. goes out of town. When I got up at 6:30 A.M. to fix the Misters' breakfast the house was quiet. No one was up yet. I opened the drapes to the pool and that's when I saw him. There he was lying face down in the shallow end of the pool. All dead like and bloody! Oh my God, how will I ever tell the Mrs." Dr. Vance said "Don't worry miss, the police will contact his wife. Due to the nature of this case, it will require the utmost security. After all, he was a Brigadier General in the armed services. Everything will be classified."

The Chief of Police entered the room and asked the doctor to step outside. Dr. Vance informed the Chief of Police that based on a preliminary exam, the victim had probably died from Apoplexy. Cause of death won't be determined until after the autopsy.

There was a knock at the door. Cordillia answered it. "Ma'am, I need to speak to the Chief of Police. The two men went out the front door and whispered "Sir, I found something really strange at the murder scene. It was a parallelogram drawn in blood with the word GREED written in the center. What do you make of that?"

Meanwhile, the Mrs. prepared herself to meet Mr. Alonzo at the Poets Corner Tavern at 9:45 P.M. She had no difficulty getting the $1.75 million. The money was packed safely in the locked brief case. What was giving her difficulty was the thought of handing over the money to Mr. Alonzo knowing that she would never know the truth about what happened to her husband.
She realized not knowing was her protection, but her obsessive personality desperately needed to know what happened. Alonzo walked in to the Tavern at exactly 9:45 P.M. He picked up the brief case and quickly left the Tavern and hailed a cab. "JFK airport." Alonzo said. As the cab pulled off, Alonzo saw the Chief of Police get out of his patrol car and enter the Tavern. The Chief of Police saw no sign of the victim's wife. In an instant she was gone.



Mini Challenge: Mount Olympus, arsonist, portraits, birch trees, "that car needs a new muffler"

4 comments:

Thom said...

Wow great story. And welcome to Wordzzle. Hmmm there are a lot of disgruntled women going around the blogosphere...Wonder where she slipped out to. I hope this is a continuing story.

Raven said...

And so the story continues... well done. Inquiring minds want to know more... why was the Mrs. so afraid? Was the General really a bad guy? What does the parallelogram with Greed mean? So many questions...

Sorry I'm so late visiting. The first few times I checked in it hadn't shown up yet and then I forgot to come back.

ccorkran said...

Thanks for the kind words, Raven. You ask such good questions. It gives Alonzo so much to think about. Candace

Nessa said...

Man, I wish I could get my hands on $1.75 million.

I can't wait to find out more.

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